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Posted on 18/11/11 8:15:55 PM |
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ahmedalij
Atmosphysician Posts: 262 Reply  |
waiting girl
Hi I wish you like it ............    |
Posted on 18/11/11 10:24:16 PM |
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marlcliff
Knight of Intrigue Posts: 171 Reply  |
Re: waiting girl
i like it  _________________ My wife told me: "Just because your blind dont use it as an excuss not to see something." |
Posted on 19/11/11 8:28:48 PM |
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ahmedalij
Atmosphysician Posts: 262 Reply |
Re: waiting girl
thanks.................................   |
Posted on 21/11/11 07:34:37 AM |
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Steve Caplin
Administrator Posts: 6987 Reply  |
Re: waiting girl
A definite feel of Edward Hopper to this. A couple of points: 1. The tables and chairs look tiny, next to that window. I'd make them at least twice the size. 2. If the lights are fixed to the ceiling, as they appear to be, why are they casting their beams in front of the bar, since this is a long way in front of them? 3. The light beams are too hard-edged, and too long. Soften them, and fade them out more quickly. 4. Since the interior of the room is lit up, and it's dark outside, we'd see very much more reflection of the room in the windows. 5. Why does the girl have such a soft edge? She seems to be evaporating! |
Posted on 21/11/11 10:01:10 PM |
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ahmedalij
Atmosphysician Posts: 262 Reply |
Re: waiting girl
Thank you Mr. Caplin for your nice remarks which I am going to follow as close as possible depending upon my capabilities............ |
Posted on 22/11/11 8:40:36 PM |
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ahmedalij
Atmosphysician Posts: 262 Reply |
Re: waiting girl
I hope that I made some progress................  |
Posted on 22/11/11 9:38:42 PM |
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Nick Curtain
Model Master Posts: 1768 Reply  |
Re: waiting girl
The tables look much better and the perspective appears good to me. In the original, the bar and the floor looked to be an extension of one another and the separation is vastly improved in the second version. In terms of points to note, the overall lighting of the room looks rather flat, whereas there is a distinct directional light on the girl. The placement of the ceiling lights could be changed, as in practice they are likely to be further apart, or in line with the walls. I think there would be more than two in a room of this size, but this is open for opinion. In any event the effect they would produce is so important and I believe the rays are too sharp. Also, they need to cast light on the ceiling and on the floor / bar and areas nearer to the light will be lighter. This will add more atmosphere to the image. Also remember that more than one light will produce more than one shadow from elements such as the bottle. I have not reworked this image in detail, but merely added a solid colour adjustment layer set to multiply and brought back some of the original light with the mask. Hope this helps. Nick  |
Posted on 22/11/11 9:56:59 PM |
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ahmedalij
Atmosphysician Posts: 262 Reply |
Re: waiting girl
Nick your touch is the touch of the Masters thank you for this wonderful modification |
Posted on 23/11/11 02:26:23 AM |
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joeysala
Perfect Palmist Posts: 604 Reply  |
Re: waiting girl
Ahmed - interesting story-telling - makes one wonder......... I'm thinking that the top of the beer bottle is too transparent - it almost disappears - ??? - or is it just me........ _________________ "Art is a blade of grass ... and in a moment I will eat it." |
Posted on 23/11/11 8:31:43 PM |
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ahmedalij
Atmosphysician Posts: 262 Reply |
Re: waiting girl
thanks ....... the bottle is going to be fixed |